suspense writing

We have been leaning suspense in our writing.

I was walking through a misty forest. I heard a loud noise. My heart pounded. All of a sudden leaves fell from the trees above me. A smell of damp moss lingered in the damp dirty air. Nervously I took one more step ahead. All of a sudden, something slithered across my feet, I stood still and screamed. Something shuddered as I closed my mouth. What was it? I don’t know…

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2 Responses to suspense writing

  1. 11mb27 says:

    If I wrote this blog again I would change the colour of my writing and the style of my writing.

  2. 11lc31 says:

    I found it interested because you used a couple adjectives.
    I really liked the suspense it made me feel like I was in there
    I think you should improve the colour of your writing.

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