We have been learning to write a setting description
With his shoes squelching in the mud he approached the concealed opening to the temple. The vines around the entrance slithered from side-to-side, looking like snakes. In the distance he could hear the sound of the water crashing. The smell of damp moss invaded his nostrils, and taking a deep breath he took his first step forward into the mossy temple.
His flaming torch that danced in the hot breeze, shone bright and let him see the sticky cobwebs in the tunnel. He waded and breached through the thick webs. As he came around the corner, he saw a shining golden idol. But he couldn’t bring himself to step forward, as he was too worried that there may be traps.
* It was brilliant how you described the setting.
* Great use of descriptive language.
– Next time try to describe the room the idol is in more.