We have been learning to write a setting description
As dawn fell , the intrigued explorer stood at the entrance of the monumental structure. Looking around, he saw animals obscuring things that he felt he needed to know. Fear over-ran his body, his hands shook violently as he lit his lamp.
Reflecting off the walls , the light danced causing shadows to appear. Stagnant walls filled the halls. Venturing even further in , he came to a room of corridors. A parade of snakes disguised themselves along the floor. Above the explorers head, cobwebs hang from the peak of the temple.
Charlie P Yr6
It has really good description and lots of adjectives that are used correctly, I like it because it has commas that are used correctly and the punctuation is great. Next time you could use less full stops.