We have been learning to write an autumnal poem
October 13th 2016
With icy air numbing my feet, with every breath I take a thick cloud of mist covers the air; slowly it vanishes.
Within the sky, tiny, bright, suffocated beams of light struggle their way through the translucent leaves,
Grieving, the trees crave for their long-lost siblings.
In the depth of the maze-like forest damp moss layered the brown dirt.
The fiery trees carve a path snaking its way to no where
Every orange leaf makes a movement like it has its own soul
Autumn once again is here
I love how you have used awesome vocabulary and how you used it in your sentences.
I also love the sentence about how the wood is maze-like.
Next time you should possibly slow down with the description and cut down on the really strong vocab and sentences.